Constructive criticism

[Vc0m]

"I've learned my lesson, here let me show that by showing that I learned nothing"

Dude, I'll be frank. The main question on my mind is: why?

Why are you acting like some sort of company trying to sell people products when this is an rp site? All you get from this site is good stories. You give good stories in you get good stories out. That's it.

CaptainL has been very accurate in his assessment, but I'll argue he downplayed the importance of brands in LAW. Not only are they NOT important, but as far as you've indicated, they actually give negative returns back because these slogans, rebranding gimmicks are just ANNOYING. I am only capitalizing for emphasis because I know for a fact that after you read this nothing will change and explaining this to a wall is more productive.

In all your freaking branding, the one thing, the one thing you never tried is be freaking normal.

As a present, here's a new slogan for you: " "

Once you get what that means, only then can anyone believe you are actually learning what you are doing wrong.

[Lilan9958]

As tempted as I am to post another gif. I will simply say this. Keep it simple hopefully this quote from one of the more well known early Entrepreneurs in Massachusetts and founder of Babson College Roger Ward Babson can help put things together.

"The finest command of language is often shown by saying nothing."

Now that doesn't mean you should say nothing at all, but there are times where sometimes its best to simply wait and listen. Also recollect yourself on what characters and story lines you want to build on. Take for instance my main girl is Gosu and I love to build new stories with her, but that also inspires me to build other stories for other characters I build upon. Pace yourself, nobody is waiting for you at the finish line when it comes to RPing on this site, what matters it the fun of collaborating with new storylines and just getting a feel for how you want to continue. All jokes aside there's no need to push yourself so hard over it ya know.

My temptation has risen...

[SimplePride]

Just thought of something: This is the only place I act like this. How silly is that? Maybe it's the vibe of competition, maybe it's the fact that I had to claw my way to where I am now, or maybe I'm just weird, but it all seems rather silly and stupid. I can't change the past, but the "brand" is officially done. I'm gonna reflect more on me as an individual more than a "brand"

I hope y'all don't mind Georgia Tech...

[Vc0m]

Just thought of something: This is the only place I act like this. How silly is that? Maybe it's the vibe of competition, maybe it's the fact that I had to claw my way to where I am now, or maybe I'm just weird, but it all seems rather silly and stupid. I can't change the past, but the "brand" is officially done. I'm gonna reflect more on me as an individual more than a "brand"

I hope y'all don't mind Georgia Tech...

OK tell me

Tell me. I am legitimately curious

Where does the competition portion of LAW comes from? Hm?

Also, cool new "brand". I have no idea what Georgia Tech even is.

[SimplePride]

Just thought of something: This is the only place I act like this. How silly is that? Maybe it's the vibe of competition, maybe it's the fact that I had to claw my way to where I am now, or maybe I'm just weird, but it all seems rather silly and stupid. I can't change the past, but the "brand" is officially done. I'm gonna reflect more on me as an individual more than a "brand"

I hope y'all don't mind Georgia Tech...

OK tell me

Tell me. I am legitimately curious

Where does the competition portion of LAW comes from? Hm?

Also, cool new "brand". I have no idea what Georgia Tech even is.

Well, wrestling is a competition...I guess? I mean, right on the front page, you have champions displayed. That gives an impression (at least to me) that there is at least a subtle hint of competition.

Also, Georgia Tech is a college institute in Atlanta. Their sports teams are called the Yellow Jackets. Where do you think my OC of the same name got her name?

[Noob]

Alright...before this makes my brain hurt anymore, let's push this back to topic. What are people's opinion on alliteration? I like to use it for move/wrestler names but I'm wondering if it's better to just try to have a theme for the wrestler.

[dlamp]

Alright...before this makes my brain hurt anymore, let's push this back to topic. What are people's opinion on alliteration? I like to use it for move/wrestler names but I'm wondering if it's better to just try to have a theme for the wrestler.

Alliteration is fine and even pretty clever if done well, but it can come across as annoying if forced out or done in a rather length and obnoxious way. I took a quick peek and your roster and everything in terms of the alliterations seems fine by my standards, nothing comes across as forced.

But... I also have a character named Nanase Nakano, so maybe I'm not one to talk.

[Lilan9958]

Just thought of something: This is the only place I act like this. How silly is that? Maybe it's the vibe of competition, maybe it's the fact that I had to claw my way to where I am now, or maybe I'm just weird, but it all seems rather silly and stupid. I can't change the past, but the "brand" is officially done. I'm gonna reflect more on me as an individual more than a "brand"

I hope y'all don't mind Georgia Tech...

So you're attending Georgia Tech?? If so congrats great school to go to.

[SuckerPunch]

Personally I love alliteration. Maybe it's because I grew up reading comics, but I tend to write a lot of alliteration in the narrative bodies of my post. I'm all for it. As entertainers things are supposed to be catchy and alliteration is one device to make things slick and memorable.

10/10, would alliterate again.

[SuckerPunch]

You know, I was thinking about it. And while alliteration doesn't look silly to me, spelling and grammar errors do. They really take me out of a post. I think we all make mistakes. But I can tell the difference between a thoughtful, passionate post and a "just getting it out there" affair by the number of spelling/grammar errors in it.

Sometimes we can write things that aren't grammatically accurate for the sake of painting a unique, stylistic picture. But that isn't quite what I mean.

What do you all think? Do these sorts of things make it difficult for you to read threads? Or am I a stuffy ol' grammar jerk?